Saturday, June 27, 2009

Writing Visually

A red curtain
A red flapping curtain
A red flapping curtain with the bottom curling inward
A red flapping curtain with a ray of light that creeps in as the curtain curls inwards at the edge
A red flapping curtain with a ray of red, dying light creeping in as the curtain curls inwards all along the left.

A ray of light splayed across the woman who sleeps on the blue couch
A woman sleeping on a blue couch
[Blinking against the sudden light, she draws herself up on her elbow and gets up to go across the room]
A ray of light splayed across a blue couch
[The sun goes down. The woman stretches and turns on the light.]
A couch of a different colour.
A room of a different light.

3 comments:

shrik said...

Reminds me of the court of King Caractacus by Rolf Harris...

Oh, the ladies of the harem of the court of King Caractacus
Were just passing by.

Oh, the noses on the faces of the ladies of the harem of the court of King Caractacus
Were just passing by.

Oh, the boys who powdered the noses on the faces of the ladies of the harem of the court of King Caractacus
Were just passing by.

Oh, the fascinating witches who put the scintillating stitches on the britches of the boys who powdered the noses on the faces of the ladies of the harem of the court of King Caractacus
Were just passing by.

And if you want to see the fascinating witches who put the scintillating stitches on the britches of the boys who powdered the noses on the faces of the ladies of the harem of the court of King Caractacus
YOU CAN'T!
They just passed by.

Mathangi said...

Splendid example Shrik, even better than the "...house that Jack built"....was trying to make the word follow the eye though....

I assume you didn't put his down from memory? :)

shrik said...

I have a bad memory as it is, had to listen and transcribe.